Re: OT: Any comments on my sci-fi writing?...

This is technically off-topic, but:
Given a lot of the people in this group are technically minded, I am
left wondering if anyone can spot obvious technical or scientific flaws
in a sci-fi story I had gotten back around to working on some more?...
 
Despite being sci-fi, I was trying to keep most of the technology within
the limits of what seems plausible, but it is possible I may have messed
things up (or if the story just sucks, which is also possible).
 
 
 
https://github.com/cr88192/bgbtech_html/blob/master/stories/2021-09-09_Skimmer1B.pdf
 
I do have another (mostly newer) story that exists within the same
timeline, still textfile only for now, set roughly 20 years later:
https://github.com/cr88192/bgbtech_html/blob/master/stories/2023-02-14_ShellbugHardMod.txt
 
 
 
Note that in these stories, there is actually a certain amount of
technological regression in some areas, as the idea was that the current
trajectory of technological development "peaked" somewhere around 2030
to 2035 and then largely stagnated and went into decline.
 
So, with a few exceptions technology portrayed for the 2070s is mostly
at "near future" levels, and by the 2090s had mostly backslid to roughly
early 2000s levels; mostly for legal/cultural reasons, primarily in the
areas of electronics and semiconductor manufacture (the demand for
"faster and better" had largely died off, in part because having more
than a certain prescribed amounts of computing power, RAM, and storage
capacity, in various predefined device categories, became illegal; in
part this made it no longer cost effective to build and maintain
"actually good" chip fabs, and things back slid towards "good enough",
say, 28nm to 90nm or so).
 
 
Note that the underlying reason for cultural/legal limitations on
compute power are basically for the same types of reasons as in things
like Dune and Battlestar Galactica, just setting ~ early/mid 2000s
technology as the benchmark seemed to make more sense than limiting
things to 1970s technology (though, in a few places, the idea is that
some amount of roughly 1940s to 1970s level technology is being used as
well).
 
Some other parts were references to "stuff that already exists but isn't
in widespread use", like E-Ink, and nitinol wire, ... Though, there are
some more speculative technologies in the mix as well.
 
Though, in the stories, the general idea is that AI / AGI still
ultimately wins, despite the efforts to suppress it.